70700 Space Swarmer
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- Nominated by: User:CzechMate/czech 06:13, January 12, 2013 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Added a description and background for the set, and slight clean-up.
- Verdict
Not Done. Weak lead section and the description could use proofreading. It's close, though.
Jeyo Lord VladekTalk The Forge 06:33, January 12, 2013 (UTC)
- So what exactly do I need to do/remove/edit? --User:CzechMate/czech 06:35, January 12, 2013 (UTC)
- The lead section should give the number of pieces and say which minifigures are included. The description has some mistakes and false data such as "...is made of predominately dark red on the inside of the ship, and lime green on the outside." There isn't any red on the inside at all, unless you mean the cockpit bubble. The description also makes it sound like the wings sprout from the sides, not the back. "Claw like" should be "claw-like" and "jet-pack" should be "jetpack". Grabber mouth could be reworded. There are also twice as many commas as there need to be.
JeyoLord VladekTalk The Forge 06:43, January 12, 2013 (UTC)
- The lead section should give the number of pieces and say which minifigures are included. The description has some mistakes and false data such as "...is made of predominately dark red on the inside of the ship, and lime green on the outside." There isn't any red on the inside at all, unless you mean the cockpit bubble. The description also makes it sound like the wings sprout from the sides, not the back. "Claw like" should be "claw-like" and "jet-pack" should be "jetpack". Grabber mouth could be reworded. There are also twice as many commas as there need to be.
- So what exactly do I need to do/remove/edit? --User:CzechMate/czech 06:35, January 12, 2013 (UTC)